Monday, April 12, 2010

Under A Silver Moon




Author's note: Wanted to write some more but I really did not want to jump back into the vampire stuff just yet. Drifted over to the Writer's Digest website and found this prompt:

"You and a friend break into your neighborhood swim club late one night to go for an after-hours dip. While splashing around in the pool, you go into shock when a dead body floats to the top. Worse yet—it's someone you know. Write this scene."


The full moon shining above lighted the way as Katie and Zane walked the narrow path through the woods that paralleled the length of their neighborhood on the way to the pool house. The only sounds beside their footsteps were of lonely crickets still singing for a mate and small animals skittering through the underbrush.

As they walk beside each other, Katie is clearly uncomfortable about sneaking out of her house so late and nervous about the dark woods around them and seeing this Zane puts his arm around her. “We will be at the pool in a minute babe and it will just be us.”

Katie rewards him for easing her fears by leaning her head over and kissing him. The kiss is short but from the moonlight reflecting off her eyes he sees her silent promise of what awaits once they get to the pool.

The young couple had known each other since elementary school having grown up in the same neighborhood and been a part of the same social circles. Still though, they had never been more than friends until the summer before college. Something always seemed to push them apart, namely Zane’s father who never thought much of Katie or her family for some reason that he would never really speak about. During their senior class trip to the Bahamas though, Zane and Katie, away from their families, began to see something special in each other.

However, college loomed before them so those feelings were set aside and as the years passed they keeping in touch through letters and the occasional phone call. Relationships with other people, some serious, flared and then died as the college years passed but the two rediscovered each other by chance after returning home.

Zane easily climbed over the old wrought iron fence surrounding the pool house as Katie slipped around to the fence door where he lets her through. The pool water sparkled in the moonlight with the two staring at each other longingly before falling into each other’s arms. Their kiss was passionate and long with the couple eager to fulfill years of pent up desire and dreams about each other. As the young couple entered the chilly waters of the pool the full moon whose light had provided a sort of comfort during their walk slide behind a large bank of clouds with a deeper darkness enveloping the two.

Their world becomes the feel of each other’s skin, the taste of each other’s lips, and the sound of words spoken they had only imagined. Feeling the security of the darkness wrap around them their bodies find each other and the world they know shrinks even further to one of primal lust and the joy that they had at last found each other.

Their moment passes, the fever subsides and Zane and Katie become children again swimming and playing in the pool while the passing clouds allow the silver moon to reappear. The returning moonlight illuminates the area allowing Zane to see a dark shape floating in the short segment of the L-shaped pool. Zane cannot completely tell what the shape is gently bobbing in the water is but he has an instinctive foreboding.

“Katie, get behind me and turn around.” Zane said as Katie is suddenly nervous and clasps her arms tightly around her naked breasts.

“Zane, you’re scaring me,” she says as he lets her go and edges closer to the dark shape floating in the water. Zane finally gets close enough to realize it is a man floating face down, the splayed arms and lack of any movement confirming in Zane’s mind that the person is long dead.

“Katie,” he said in as calm a voice he could manage, “I need you get out the water and call the police from the phone mounted on the wall next the pump house.”

As Zane heard Katie begin to wade through the pool back toward the other end he flipped the body to see whom it was. Staring back at him with lifeless eyes was Zane’s own father. The scream that came out of Zane was instinctive, hearing his pure and utter sorrow Katie turned and rushed back to the man she now knew she loved.

As the couple embraced naked in the water seeking only comfort from each other next Zane’s dead father, a figure emerged from the shadows.

“I really hated to kill Edward although he was always able to sense something of my true nature,” a male voice said stepping out into the moonlight. “But despite my efforts all through your life Katie I knew there was nothing I could do to stop Zane from eventually soiling you beyond any usefulness. You two were simply meant for each other”

Both Zane and Katie are shocked to see her father stepping out of the shadows. Even more disturbing was the manic look on his face and the almost lyrical tone to his voice as if he could start singing at any minute. Knowing something was very wrong they held each other closer feeling a growing danger.

“My backers had such plans for you Katie my darling; it really is a shame that you are lost to us now. However, with a little more work on my part either one of your younger sisters will do nicely.” With that, Katie’s father throws the electrical disconnect hanging on the wall beside him that ran to the underwater pool lights. As the lever falls completing the circuit both Zane and Katie saw the broken lights and exposed wires under the water.

As the current raced through the pool and through Zane and Katie’s bodies they sink into the water still holding each other. Katie’s last thoughts before the final darkness engulfed her were terror filled as she saw her father step back into the shadows with his eyes seemingly glowing red.

The next day as police arrive after the discovery of the bodies everyone saw how distraught Katie’s father was at the sight of his lifeless daughter. Without any effort on his part the general census of the authorities present was that Zane’s father had discovered the lovers in the pool and in a fit of mindless rage thrown the switch since it was well know he had issues with his son seeing the girl.

“You two are all I have now.” Katie’s father says as friends lead him away from the pool with his two younger daughters by his side.

20 comments:

Beach Bum said...

Okay, the rules back at the Writer's Digest were for the story to be under 500 words. If anyone thinks I can limit myself to something under 500 words I have a bridge in Charleston I liked to sell you.

Let me know what you think and please give me any feedback you might offer.

Vigilante said...

This is a movie, I saw it. And it ran long, too! Dudn't matter, cuz it was a good one. Too.

David Barber said...

Beach, sorry I've not got round to reading your last couple of pieces. I'll catch up over the next few days mate. I've given you an award. Check my blog.

Utah Savage said...

I turned one of my short stories in for this contest. I cut Body Warmth into a 500 word story. At first I cut sentences. Then I went in search of one word here and one word there. I think it turned a story with a bit of horror at the heart into a taut, dark hard little jem. I might not win anything, but it did get me to see how I need to edit.

Gwendolyn H. Barry said...

Enjoyed.
Looking forward to second installment of last story, too.

Beach Bum said...

Vigil: Please tell me you are not serious! I hate to think I accidentally copied something.

David Barber: No problem my friend, will be by later, stole the computer from my son for a short time who is working on a science report.

Utah: This was fun, and I saw a new writing contest opening up someplace and if I can my head and the piece of paper I wrote down the information I'll send it to you.

Gwen: Thanks, still working out the details in my head.

sunshine said...

What kind of plans did he have for his daughter???

I enjoyed this story. Hated that they both died in the end but, that's how the story goes... :P

I thought that it was a really good short story.

((Hugs))
Laura

Vigilante said...

J.K., Beach!

Beach Bum said...

Sunshine: Didn't think that far ahead but Katie's father was demon possessed so it wasn't good.

Vigil: JK? If you say so, although I didn't picture Katie amd Zane as Hermione Granger and Ron Weasley. Now I have been told I am about as clear headed as Ron Weasley which was meant as an insult but I like the character so I was cool with it.

goatman said...

ick!

MadMike said...

Beach I have a movie recommendation for you, following the horror/suspense theme:

The Collector. Not for children under 50...It will scare the socks off you. Try it out and let me.

As to limiting stories get rid of all adverbs. You would be surprised at what that can do to cut down content. Secondly, reduce bios to brief keywords.

Good job nonetheless.

Beach Bum said...

Goatman: Just trying another direction on things, have a more usual for me surfing story coming next.

Madmike: I'll have to rent the movie.

Holte Ender said...

Very good, sucked me in a little, was expecting happy ending after a scare. When you think about it nothing ends happy.

Beach Bum said...

Holte: The other people at the Writer's digest website pretty much covered all the normal stuff and had started bleeding over into the horror a couple of times. Wanted to get something out and this sort of just happened. I admit thought I messed up on the dad, I wanted to make it a little more vague about his demon posession.

Randal Graves said...

A happy ending would have completely ruined this cautionary tale of not swimming so soon after eating. Good stuff.

MadMike said...

Beach I didn't mean to imply that you had too many adverbs and etc. My advice came from the book.

Will "take no prisoners" Hart said...

That was excellent, double b - a real page-turner (or in this case a mouse-clicker). The only change that I would make (and, yes, I think that I could totally get our buddy, Teeluck, on board here, too) would be to change Zane into Jane. Then it would be perfect!

Beach Bum said...

Randal: Damn straight, momma's nagging had a real purpose.

Madmike: No worries, was cut off by an irate teenagers looking to work on a school project, really need to buy a wireless router.

Will: I am all for, and a big supporter of hot lesbian action. Had a tiny segment in the vampire story before this post.

lime said...

it was an electrifying tale. (sorry, i couldn't resist)

Beach Bum said...

Lime: No worries, though I thought your comment was shocking. Sorry, I had to do it myself.