tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-829836469690492751.post8311416380215734760..comments2024-02-01T20:22:59.199-05:00Comments on Random Brain Droppings: Flash Fiction Friday (Cycle 52) A Special Kind of HellCommander Zaiushttp://www.blogger.com/profile/11000824454124236774noreply@blogger.comBlogger17125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-829836469690492751.post-52690489216490298912011-10-22T16:40:29.465-04:002011-10-22T16:40:29.465-04:00ya know i could see this being both a comedy and a...ya know i could see this being both a comedy and a tragedy, even simultaneously. quite enjoyed it.limehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17259558876349307173noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-829836469690492751.post-57340575486525460392011-10-15T05:16:25.863-04:002011-10-15T05:16:25.863-04:00Beach, that was great. Well written, full of deta...Beach, that was great. Well written, full of detail and a great ending. If you do a re-write and expand it I'd love to read it. <br /><br />Your storytelling and writing improves with each one I read. Well done. TFFO sub's are opening in a week or so and I'd like to see one of your stories in the inbox. 1000 words though buddy, if you can do it. ;-)David Barberhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05006533626998905560noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-829836469690492751.post-47081455086712259252011-10-14T12:06:53.890-04:002011-10-14T12:06:53.890-04:00Very compelling read... it pulled me right along.
...Very compelling read... it pulled me right along.<br /><br />I really like your take on the prompt, and the explanation there at the end for why the couple kept returning to the lake... very good! Adds a whole layer to the story... how they dealt with the guilt, which seemed to be the only thing that kept them together all those years.<br /><br />Yes, Hell isn't always fire and brimstone... sometimes it is the dark corridors of one's own mind, and the dread knowledge of walking them... forever.<br /><br />Excellent read, Beach... very well done!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13430872985988041256noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-829836469690492751.post-38813478151758297002011-10-14T08:32:33.770-04:002011-10-14T08:32:33.770-04:00I like the image of them sitting in the car, stari...I like the image of them sitting in the car, staring at the lake. I've never tried Flash Fiction; I'm worried that nothing whatsoever would come of it!Nancehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15166865250789996825noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-829836469690492751.post-14021012365115536902011-10-13T20:42:37.762-04:002011-10-13T20:42:37.762-04:00Give me an address/ box number, etc, you can send ...Give me an address/ box number, etc, you can send to my PO Box listed on my blog/ journal with my home phone, I can snail mail you a copy if you like. One of the serial killer's I based a few on in another state asked me just a couple year's ago for a copy as well, but when he got it the prison had a fit and sent it back to me with a letter Why ... heh, heh, heh, heh, heh : ) (how can I contaminate the mind of a person who received multiple death sentence's already and is in maximum security? ... dumb asses : ) But yes ... I have sent out several copies that are still requested from time to time, even though it had to be at least a decade since I wrote them Bum.Ranch Chimphttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14086251248546955720noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-829836469690492751.post-10939051181569386322011-10-13T15:21:00.060-04:002011-10-13T15:21:00.060-04:00Good ole spy story. Very entertaining read.Good ole spy story. Very entertaining read.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01225821016549161314noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-829836469690492751.post-47185502600469050292011-10-13T08:00:45.243-04:002011-10-13T08:00:45.243-04:00Thoroughly engrossing -- and entertaining! -- from...Thoroughly engrossing -- and entertaining! -- from start to finish.<br /><br />Have added you to my blogroll so I can keep tabs on you...<br /><br />PearlPearlhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05261369905176088917noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-829836469690492751.post-24486983536786809122011-10-13T03:23:17.422-04:002011-10-13T03:23:17.422-04:00Glen: That evil wizard David limited me on my numb...Glen: That evil wizard David limited me on my number of words forcing a bloody edit. And while I am still a little under 200 words over the limit I think I kept the main theme about marriage.<br /><br />I plan on expanding this story soon.<br /><br />John Myste: My friend that is impossible, in fact I plan on expanding this story to far greater detail including a segment at Serge and Isidora's house.<br /><br />Mike: Thank you sir! Luckly my wife does not read my stuf or she might get ideas.<br /><br />Sue H. I figure Hell has to be more than fire and brimstone. <br /><br />Windsmoke: Yeah, and the redhead was smoking hot!<br /><br />Pixel: Actually I knew several people who fit Serge and Isidora's type, and its scary.<br /><br />Ranch: Your story sounds very interesting, I'd like to read it.<br /><br />Randal: Hey, they paid the price for trying to defeat the United States of America. And it was a heavy and terrible one at that.Commander Zaiushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11000824454124236774noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-829836469690492751.post-80384919555757215942011-10-12T14:43:02.622-04:002011-10-12T14:43:02.622-04:00You cruel, cruel bastard.You cruel, cruel bastard.Randal Graveshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08728992897551848531noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-829836469690492751.post-28973719686693552402011-10-12T08:19:53.810-04:002011-10-12T08:19:53.810-04:00The only thing I would probably be decent at writi...The only thing I would probably be decent at writing, would probably be a drug transport/ smuggling piece, heh, heh, heh, heh, heh : )<br /><br />All shit aside though Bum, I once had wrote a 8/ 9 part series I put together that was fiction, of a character who was a serial killer ... but I actually pieced it together from actual serial killer's and such that I was in contact with on Death Row, etc ... after getting a tad deeper into their lives and their childhoods etc during conversation's. I done it about a decade ago, so year's before I had a computer (I bought my first computer here 2008) it was a series, a few of them were printed in a couple alternative underground magazine's. I thought about doing them again and including the original's online, but it been tough to decide, I will tell you that they were very graphic though is why ... I detailed them from chosing the victim through the killing's. At the same time they had a romantic undertone, hard to explain, but I used real life scenario's of daily engagement's, meeting, etc ... then I used the method's and thought's of the killer's I dealt with, if that make's any sense. My point also was even though the serial killer is considered viscious for such act's, it doesnt have much to do with anger ... in some cases it was a sort of bizarre love affair and being one with the victim.Ranch Chimphttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14086251248546955720noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-829836469690492751.post-6748433697476198502011-10-12T08:02:16.227-04:002011-10-12T08:02:16.227-04:00I read this yesterday Bum, anywayz, Thanx for the ...I read this yesterday Bum, anywayz, Thanx for the classic spy story read. A duffle bag sized nuke in DC to do a head count of poitician's, eh? Brilliant, why didnt I think of that (just kidding : ) <br /><br />Later Guy ....Ranch Chimphttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14086251248546955720noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-829836469690492751.post-25149919528568285962011-10-11T20:41:04.866-04:002011-10-11T20:41:04.866-04:00LOL! Now you've got me wondering about this ol...LOL! Now you've got me wondering about this old couple in my neighborhood...Pixel Peeperhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17553862902461169270noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-829836469690492751.post-63186536405066191592011-10-11T17:03:58.584-04:002011-10-11T17:03:58.584-04:00Reminds me of the russian sleeper agents that were...Reminds me of the russian sleeper agents that were caught recently in America without the twist of a nuclear bomb :-).Windsmoke.https://www.blogger.com/profile/12225394580987872677noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-829836469690492751.post-2314973663011223252011-10-11T16:02:51.245-04:002011-10-11T16:02:51.245-04:00Oh boy - this was a joy to read! Such a wonderful ...Oh boy - this was a joy to read! Such a wonderful concept - I am mightily jealous! And I thoroughly enjoyed the closing, vindictive sentence! Well done, sir! ;-)SueHhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11394307650434614637noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-829836469690492751.post-20100197286959903122011-10-11T14:30:38.902-04:002011-10-11T14:30:38.902-04:00Sounds like a fairly normal marriage to me, a no t...Sounds like a fairly normal marriage to me, a no time limit Hell in the Cell match between Classy Freddie Blassie and the Great Moolah. Twisted nicely,good work.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00533184345345882921noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-829836469690492751.post-57636869783685827862011-10-11T11:15:01.305-04:002011-10-11T11:15:01.305-04:00Firstly, it is depressing! Good, but depressing! I...Firstly, it is depressing! Good, but depressing! I feel sorry for the spies that would have killed as many Americans as possible. <br /><br />Secondly, it's 944 words, not a max of 750! Please correct and resubmit.John Mystehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16263634313238599515noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-829836469690492751.post-39884779003076873172011-10-11T10:30:23.849-04:002011-10-11T10:30:23.849-04:00Only you could come up with that! great work.Only you could come up with that! great work.Glenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11562111165943505509noreply@blogger.com