tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-829836469690492751.post5675700370220563926..comments2024-02-01T20:22:59.199-05:00Comments on Random Brain Droppings: Flash Fiction Friday #50 - Terrible Suburban SecretsCommander Zaiushttp://www.blogger.com/profile/11000824454124236774noreply@blogger.comBlogger5125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-829836469690492751.post-20133967355117540962016-08-15T16:33:49.251-04:002016-08-15T16:33:49.251-04:00Joyce: Thanks! Like I mentioned my fiction ideas h...Joyce: Thanks! Like I mentioned my fiction ideas have been flatter than the Kansas prairie for a long time. I loved this prompt though, so much I might return to the story and expand it some at a later date. Commander Zaiushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11000824454124236774noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-829836469690492751.post-23620740602333652862016-08-13T12:56:03.185-04:002016-08-13T12:56:03.185-04:00I really enjoyed this one. You did a great job exp...I really enjoyed this one. You did a great job exploring the dirty little secrets hidden behind closed doors in the cute little coves with tidy sidewalks and well manicured lawns. It seemed at the start that the one sister knew something was going on, but spared her sister the details. I certainly didn't expect the twist at the end. I, too, grew up with sending the kids to the other room while the grown-ups talk mentality. We, of course, listened in as best we could though, and our little neighborhood was actually a soap opera and a half at times.<br /><br />Most of the intrigue was generally centered around members of the same family. Your story clearly reveals the hypocrisy that can occur between two people that are supposed to have each other's back.Joycehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03275503653927579472noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-829836469690492751.post-56945891134233571762016-08-13T04:25:40.150-04:002016-08-13T04:25:40.150-04:00Pixel: Back in the 1970's in my hometown neigh...Pixel: Back in the 1970's in my hometown neighborhood, word got out about an incident where a guy threw his best friend out of his living room window. The adults talked about the event in hushed tones in front of us kids never revealing what exactly happened and like most things it was eventually forgotten. Some time during the 1990's I learned that the owner of the house and his wife were having the other guy and his wife over for dinner. Apparently everything was fine until the guests tried to recruit the other couple into their swingers club. <br /><br />Back in the 1970's you simply didn't talk about such things in respectable company in my hometown. Long story short, when I learned this information it explained why several families either became hermits or moved away all together.<br /><br />Rose: Absolutely, my jumping around in time was far too quirky. One of the reasons I gave up flash fiction for a long time was my inability to smooth over rough parts in a story. I just lost the proper feel for how a story should flow. Another reason was simply a good number of my stories simply fell flat that a soda left uncapped. Commander Zaiushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11000824454124236774noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-829836469690492751.post-34444396450557789162016-08-12T18:07:19.295-04:002016-08-12T18:07:19.295-04:00An interesting exploration of the relationship bet...An interesting exploration of the relationship between the two sisters. It jumped about a bit and I wasn't always sure where I was in the story but the twist really hit me - didn't see it coming at all.<br /><br />Thanks for sharing!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08943912185707278625noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-829836469690492751.post-28072689059270611872016-08-10T20:34:33.856-04:002016-08-10T20:34:33.856-04:00I have a feeling stuff like this is going on quite...I have a feeling stuff like this is going on quite a bit in our sanitized homogenized suburban neighborhoods!Pixel Peeperhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17553862902461169270noreply@blogger.com