tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-829836469690492751.post4970807213216602434..comments2024-02-01T20:22:59.199-05:00Comments on Random Brain Droppings: Flash Fiction Friday (Cycle 19) Desert morning surpriseCommander Zaiushttp://www.blogger.com/profile/11000824454124236774noreply@blogger.comBlogger25125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-829836469690492751.post-30383013147118775842011-02-27T21:26:34.260-05:002011-02-27T21:26:34.260-05:00Very cool! I followed the FB link to the zombie ta...Very cool! I followed the FB link to the zombie tale, and find there's others I'd missed. Like going to the fridge knowing you don't have any soda or beer in there, and discover a couple way in the back someone missed.Osohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09513535195785731541noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-829836469690492751.post-80497063413217026012011-02-26T09:54:22.848-05:002011-02-26T09:54:22.848-05:00Goatman: I'm Southern, we like explosions.
Ra...Goatman: I'm Southern, we like explosions.<br /><br />Ranch: I'm serious about finding some place way off the map to get away from people. I'd like it to be green and tropical but it could also be out in the desert. For that reason I have looked a little into propane generators. <br /><br />Will: Mexican ladies are my eternal fantasy.Commander Zaiushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11000824454124236774noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-829836469690492751.post-55544568331747934042011-02-25T23:10:47.808-05:002011-02-25T23:10:47.808-05:00Carmen, the Mexican nanny. I'm thinking, doubl...Carmen, the Mexican nanny. I'm thinking, double b, that that could easily be out mutual Facebook friend, Eluvia. Guatemala, Mexico close enough, no?Will "take no prisoners" Harthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02315659209094683602noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-829836469690492751.post-64090082040054721902011-02-25T05:43:00.294-05:002011-02-25T05:43:00.294-05:00Good Morning Bum!
You write pretty good short sto...Good Morning Bum!<br /><br />You write pretty good short stories actually, your like me, I like those romantic memories, heh, heh, heh, heh, heh :) And I'm one who never even read much fiction to begin with. But alot of this just brought back ole pleasant memories for me Guy ... the setting that is, I realize it's somewhere's in New Mexico, but remind's me of time's out around El Paso, there is a small sliver of New Mexico that hang's down seperating the state's of Texas and Arizona over there, it was alway's like a brief New Mexico visit for me on my way to Los Angeles (Via I- 10), such beautiful country out that way Guy. I am old enough to remember when Juarez was cool and a bunch of fun too! I especially loved the house in the picture, look's great! And yes ... propane, generator's are a way of life out there. I have alway's fantasized of my retirement home's/ area's as being about 50- 100 mile's east of El Paso (some remote area's over there I explored and loved, but I been all through Big Bend country too ... or else another little area that's down around the Valley of South Texas ... around the Brownsville area, I love the tropical area of that, and like being close to Mexico in particular for easier access, just a cool place to go (when the cartel's arent at each other's throat's of course). I live in Dallas, which doesnt have any flavour but the urban sort of any other town basically, but it's a fairly cool town, just not as cool as out there.<br /><br />Later Bum!Ranch Chimphttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14086251248546955720noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-829836469690492751.post-90866960305717420702011-02-24T16:42:46.819-05:002011-02-24T16:42:46.819-05:00A pleasant thought!!
I guess death has to be in...A pleasant thought!!<br /><br /><br /><br />I guess death has to be involved.goatmanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02317617928368945316noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-829836469690492751.post-8248413399260079262011-02-24T01:10:04.384-05:002011-02-24T01:10:04.384-05:00Doc: Thanks my friend! Seriously all this story pr...Doc: Thanks my friend! Seriously all this story proves is that if you put a redneck monkey in front of a computer with a word processor given enough time the balding primate will hit enough random keys to make a decent story.<br /><br />Flannery: LOL!!! I am rather fond of old movie pirates and consider myself born two-hundred yers too late for my true profession. Those 21st century pirates don't fit the movie mold.<br /><br />Joyce: Actually thought about having the dead dad give the prerecorded speech and explaining how happy he was with his son and praise Emily with how her bad behavior changed him but could not get it to fit right.Commander Zaiushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11000824454124236774noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-829836469690492751.post-72748077697758974032011-02-23T19:29:59.940-05:002011-02-23T19:29:59.940-05:00How devilishly delicious! This was terrific and I...How devilishly delicious! This was terrific and I adore the twist at the end! Fantastic.Joycehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03275503653927579472noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-829836469690492751.post-75286323535169267852011-02-23T16:57:26.083-05:002011-02-23T16:57:26.083-05:00Hey BB, just so's you know...my FFF requiremen...Hey BB, just so's you know...my FFF requirements are more like the Pirate Code; they're really just guidelines. :-)Jenny Jenny Flanneryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07621715431584059448noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-829836469690492751.post-54284448903797361612011-02-23T13:33:01.808-05:002011-02-23T13:33:01.808-05:00Never, ever apoligize for having a twist ending or...Never, ever apoligize for having a twist ending or killing the villian. I have to say BB, this is the best one I've read so far of this weeks offerings. Other than a few missing commas, I can't find a fault with it. It reads like the sort of short fiction I used to read in Playboy. You should be proud.<br /><br />DocDochttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16979621370660001312noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-829836469690492751.post-55850164693786195782011-02-23T02:26:02.145-05:002011-02-23T02:26:02.145-05:00Flannery: Thanks, wasn't sure it fit the requi...Flannery: Thanks, wasn't sure it fit the requiremens. <br /><br />Mike: Yeah, I like a good explosion but thats just the redneck in me. Was in that area while in the service and want to get out west again sometime.Commander Zaiushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11000824454124236774noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-829836469690492751.post-6757052846767935402011-02-22T11:36:45.021-05:002011-02-22T11:36:45.021-05:00Missed this one til now.
Very well done Beach. Y...Missed this one til now.<br /><br />Very well done Beach. You definitely seem to be getting the hang of this fiction stuff.<br /><br />Loved the ending. But then I have always had a weakness for explosions when the bad guy, uh gal gets it in the end.MRMacrumhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01414173517957120477noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-829836469690492751.post-6073435119774897252011-02-22T08:54:53.247-05:002011-02-22T08:54:53.247-05:00Justice! Sweet justice. I really like what you did...Justice! Sweet justice. I really like what you did with this story.Jenny Jenny Flanneryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07621715431584059448noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-829836469690492751.post-9704740663506618762011-02-21T19:10:48.542-05:002011-02-21T19:10:48.542-05:00Akelamalu: Thanks! I would have addded more to Emi...Akelamalu: Thanks! I would have addded more to Emily's dark character but I ran up against the maximum word count. I sort of had an idea of having her planning an accident for Bill.<br /><br />Mother Theresa: Thanks, really I am a halfway decent guy who wouldn't hurt a tiny bird. Also, thanks of the award and will work on it by Wednesday.<br /><br />Lime: Thanks! I have a friend at work who said I could switch the characters around with Emily being the winner and I would have a great Lifetime movie.<br /><br />Sue: Thanks! I had one problem, I had a hard time accepting the word "cottage" for the small desert house built for Bill and Emily. Its didn't seen right for the setting but I went ahead and used it.Commander Zaiushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11000824454124236774noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-829836469690492751.post-31753123046716293742011-02-21T09:43:30.653-05:002011-02-21T09:43:30.653-05:00Excellent twist - I loved it!
(and she deserved i...Excellent twist - I loved it! <br />(and she deserved it!)SueHhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11394307650434614637noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-829836469690492751.post-36078867406861973722011-02-21T09:01:28.425-05:002011-02-21T09:01:28.425-05:00wow! that packed an explosive punch i never saw c...wow! that packed an explosive punch i never saw coming. well done!limehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17259558876349307173noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-829836469690492751.post-80077911935784346992011-02-21T07:58:33.831-05:002011-02-21T07:58:33.831-05:00Hmmm...remind me never to cross you. ;) Just kidd...Hmmm...remind me never to cross you. ;) Just kidding, I really think it's a great story, with an interesting twist. Oh, and I have an award for you over at my blog, so come check it out.Mother Theresahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09648404612737553605noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-829836469690492751.post-3134569588715297702011-02-21T05:49:13.483-05:002011-02-21T05:49:13.483-05:00Oh she SO deserved that!!
Fabulous writing Domi...Oh she SO deserved that!! <br /><br />Fabulous writing Dominic.Akelamaluhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11234268568845148285noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-829836469690492751.post-45599072160435793442011-02-21T03:24:07.251-05:002011-02-21T03:24:07.251-05:00Marja and Cloudia: I wrote something that might be...Marja and Cloudia: I wrote something that might be called a "romance" story several months ago, but that was a special situation. It based on a guy waiting hours for someone in a Myrtle Beach bar only to leave a short time before an attractive lady came running inside to find him.<br /><br />As fiction goes this is the best I can do.Commander Zaiushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11000824454124236774noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-829836469690492751.post-64821320412207021082011-02-20T23:35:43.493-05:002011-02-20T23:35:43.493-05:00ka BOOM!
Aloha from Honolulu,
Comfort Spiral
&...ka BOOM!<br /><br />Aloha from Honolulu,<br /><br /><br /><a href="http://comfortspiral.blogspot.com/" rel="nofollow">Comfort Spiral</a><br /><br />><}}(°>Cloudiahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05853753108637831069noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-829836469690492751.post-49159087132947855962011-02-20T19:49:21.349-05:002011-02-20T19:49:21.349-05:00Lol a romance turning into a horror story. Very cr...Lol a romance turning into a horror story. Very creative beachMarjahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17458942200244031009noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-829836469690492751.post-68245445813584959782011-02-20T14:30:42.727-05:002011-02-20T14:30:42.727-05:00Pixel: You know I still wonder about that couple I...Pixel: You know I still wonder about that couple I saw in the bar not far from the now gone Pavilion. Of course the greatest detail on that story was made up but the guy did spend a long time clearly waiting and after he left I did hear the lady ask the bartender about someone waiting and basically describe the guy that had left. <br /><br />For this story I wondered about a honest and goodhearted guy who was remade by his wife, of course this could have easily been turned around with the wife the "good guy"<br />although Bill the husband wasn't a good guy. <br /><br />Windsmoke: In my mind the dad was already a slightly more than power mad type with his son taking a more genuine and open approach to life and people. The irony was that Bill's wife took advantage of the basic character in her husband and made him into what his father wanted all along.<br /><br />Coastal Punchman: Thanks, I have a bad habit of blowing things up in my stories. I really need to get away from it. <br /><br />Liberality: Like I mentioned above I sort of see Bill's dead dad as a mega-J.R. Ewing and Bill himself as a corrupted Bobby Ewing. The main reason for offing Emily was money which makes people do insane things. Especially since Emily had plans to rip the financial guts from Bill. <br /><br />On a lighter note I hope I get back west one day, I loved that section of the country although I would not want to live there.Commander Zaiushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11000824454124236774noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-829836469690492751.post-350621200187675362011-02-20T14:02:16.818-05:002011-02-20T14:02:16.818-05:00Uh, whatever happened to d.i.v.o.r.c.e.? It's...Uh, whatever happened to d.i.v.o.r.c.e.? It's a better way of dealing with an unfaithful asshole rather than killing them don't you think. Men. :~PLife As I Know It Nowhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03733963455243806298noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-829836469690492751.post-89946767158360445202011-02-20T13:10:34.517-05:002011-02-20T13:10:34.517-05:00Dude! You are scary! But this is very creative -...Dude! You are scary! But this is very creative - loved it.<br /><br />CPCoaster Punchmanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12587366749348273040noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-829836469690492751.post-10782868200745909932011-02-20T00:23:05.664-05:002011-02-20T00:23:05.664-05:00Plenty of gold digging women around. She got what ...Plenty of gold digging women around. She got what she deserved in the end for all her betrayal's and sneaking around, fantastic twist at the end, well done :-).Windsmoke.https://www.blogger.com/profile/12225394580987872677noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-829836469690492751.post-25687993467729389342011-02-19T20:06:09.327-05:002011-02-19T20:06:09.327-05:00Unrequited love with an explosive twist!
And I wa...Unrequited love with an explosive twist!<br /><br />And I was expecting another one of those Myrtle Beach "just missed each other" type stories!Pixel Peeperhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17553862902461169270noreply@blogger.com