tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-829836469690492751.post1301914209289752250..comments2024-02-01T20:22:59.199-05:00Comments on Random Brain Droppings: Suddenly Falling from the SkyCommander Zaiushttp://www.blogger.com/profile/11000824454124236774noreply@blogger.comBlogger16125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-829836469690492751.post-57498790381734207102010-02-12T03:36:57.190-05:002010-02-12T03:36:57.190-05:00Hill: I saw Joe and Martha down on St. Martin a fe...Hill: I saw Joe and Martha down on St. Martin a few years ago. I promised them to keep their ultimate fate secret.Commander Zaiushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11000824454124236774noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-829836469690492751.post-9349128354720627112010-02-11T20:02:05.305-05:002010-02-11T20:02:05.305-05:00Very nice, Beach.
Reader is left to imagine wheth...Very nice, Beach.<br /><br />Reader is left to imagine whether Marthat leaves with him or not.<br /><br />Might be a good idea to leave it at that, Beach. Reader writes his/her own ending. More romantic? :-)HILLBLOGGERhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05977843513566589811noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-829836469690492751.post-10211315024587487982010-02-08T02:08:56.679-05:002010-02-08T02:08:56.679-05:00Middle Ditch: If I can get motivated enough for an...Middle Ditch: If I can get motivated enough for another draft I'll add more about Martha. Like I explained she was in a previous set of exercises and caught Hell being splashed with icy water at a bus stop.<br /><br />The word verification is a pain but some people keep trying to post spam and it at least slows them down.<br /><br />Randal: Thanks, and I like those endings as well. Never had a safety desposit box so I have no idea that actual procedures to get into one. If I find out I need to change it I can make the bank a self-service storage area.<br /><br />David: Its a great course. I have some idea of a story where Martha doesn't leave with him but I'm going to have to think it through.<br /><br />Goatman: No worries my friend. I enjoyed the creative technique the professor gave us because there are times when all the planets and moons align in my house with everyone occupied and no one screaming my name but I can't really get going with anything. Now the professor said we should drive on through and write even though we may hate what we are typing but this creative trick she showed really was fun.<br /><br />As for couple meeting secretly in the parking lot the hospital where I work has more cameras on campus than Orwell's London in "1984". Security knew about them from the first and I'm actually surprised some that no one was sent out to check on what they were doing. <br /><br />Teeluck: It was fun but just a few minutes ago I found a couple of typos, they drive me crazy.<br /><br />Oso and Hill: Thanks guys!<br /><br />Beekeeper: That is not only where I could place them its sort of my own little expat fantasy.<br /><br />Oso: In my travels I love those little food stands. One that sticks in my head was a jerk chicken stand on the Dutch side of St. Martin. Damn bus driver was doing 50 miles and hour around hairpin turns and we didn't stop. Tried to go back but never did.Commander Zaiushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11000824454124236774noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-829836469690492751.post-30165528002398518722010-02-08T00:25:52.863-05:002010-02-08T00:25:52.863-05:00Bee I remember getting fish tacos in San Felipe 4 ...Bee I remember getting fish tacos in San Felipe 4 for 1.00<br /><br />the kid may have been working for them while Joe and Martha were off beachcombing.Osohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09513535195785731541noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-829836469690492751.post-27267560721128892652010-02-07T11:52:00.179-05:002010-02-07T11:52:00.179-05:00I think they moved to a small (but inhabited) isla...I think they moved to a small (but inhabited) island somewhere...or maybe Mexico, somewhere on the coast...started up a little tourist shack, and sold shell necklaces and fish tacos. They spent the rest of their lives beachcombing in the early mornings and selling schmaltzy stuff to the travelistas into the late evening.Beekeepers Apprenticehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03147256400096114177noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-829836469690492751.post-11179206708833960592010-02-06T21:28:11.314-05:002010-02-06T21:28:11.314-05:00What Randal said...
Really good stuff, Beach.
:)...What Randal said...<br /><br />Really good stuff, Beach.<br /><br />:)Mehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14960542364479215780noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-829836469690492751.post-56322985999639746412010-02-06T20:52:48.628-05:002010-02-06T20:52:48.628-05:00Beach,
I'm glad you made it up to Martha!
I...Beach,<br />I'm glad you made it up to Martha!<br />I've always loved that name, there are so many cute Martha's running around.<br />Well running around avoiding me.<br />Good story bro.Osohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09513535195785731541noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-829836469690492751.post-20362488429628293672010-02-06T18:36:03.359-05:002010-02-06T18:36:03.359-05:00Very interesting...I enjoyed every word...Very interesting...I enjoyed every word...Teeluckhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07436834652576541130noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-829836469690492751.post-18904299599924399622010-02-06T17:51:39.714-05:002010-02-06T17:51:39.714-05:00My only point with the last comment was that there...My only point with the last comment was that there seem to be no end of tricky gadgets presented to those wishing to be writers or improve upon their writing skills. I am sure that the nice writing-lady has the best of intentions and that you will learn something from her;<br />but your stories are interesting in their own right and need no tricks to be put together into a readable form -- with a bit of trim of course. The last post of your viewing an early-morning meeting in the parking lot is prime example (I still can see the two waving their arms excitedly as they relate alone and unseen,as they assume (can any of us actually be alone and unseen outdoors these days?)they are.) Your ability to present a scene and have it create lasting images in the readers' mind is a gift. A bit of work on the "parking lot confab" story could create a nice short story although you may have to go fictional with some of the details and plot layout to expand on the situation and make it more than it actually was in reality. And that would be my advice if I ever teach a class on writing --yeah right!-- write what you know and see, then elaborate.<br /><br />I of course am no writer. As I presently read Franny and Zooey, as a final wave to Mr. Salinger, I am humbled by a truly good descriptive writer and realize that I will never measure up and will not try to outdo the masters. <br />I typically buy my spark plugs rather than make them in the lathe, as an example.goatmanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02317617928368945316noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-829836469690492751.post-55200753258703140582010-02-06T12:11:58.379-05:002010-02-06T12:11:58.379-05:00Everything has been said above mate. Spot on writ...Everything has been said above mate. Spot on writing and I agree with Randal, I wouldn't mind knowing what happens next.<br /><br />Well done, David.<br /><br />P.S. Obviously a course well worth the money. Keep it up, buddy.David Barberhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05006533626998905560noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-829836469690492751.post-27704911525562914152010-02-06T10:53:02.861-05:002010-02-06T10:53:02.861-05:00I can't believe you didn't make Joe give a...I can't believe you didn't make Joe give all that money to the local megachurch. How is the right reverend supposed to scoot around town in only five luxury cars?<br /><br />Good stuff dude, I dig endings like this where the reader can only speculate about what happens next, but I wouldn't mind actually knowing what happens next.Randal Graveshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08728992897551848531noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-829836469690492751.post-43147660129718243392010-02-06T04:56:39.567-05:002010-02-06T04:56:39.567-05:00You are a natural. Now make this story into a scri...You are a natural. Now make this story into a script and let Martha future in it too so we learn a little bit more about her. I could actually see this work.<br /><br />Word verification was a hard one: frougmvy<br /><br />Am I the only one who says the letters out loud when typing them in?Middle Ditchhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16493665280732775898noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-829836469690492751.post-44865587807550532312010-02-05T22:47:16.489-05:002010-02-05T22:47:16.489-05:00Holte Ender: I'm a sucker for happy endings. T...Holte Ender: I'm a sucker for happy endings. There is far too much insane crap in the world now so I figure I can at least end most of my stories on some sort of upturn. I left the ultimate answer to the question Joe asked Martha up in the air though. <br /><br />Sunshine: I had to add just what you mentioned about the money bringing trouble after thinking about it. That was a damn good point Laura, such money would not be abandoned for long. Another good point is the dry cleaner, he would have had to have a relationship with the dead mobster's son to even have the suit to begin with?!?!?! WOW! Believe it or not that didn't occur to me at all! Of course I wrote this draft last night at work. Yea, I sat on my butt last night and screwed off, don't turn me in, please. <br /><br />I did mention Joe thinking about whether it was worth taking the money over the possibility of a "sudden bullet to the head" but I didn't consider the everything.<br /><br />That was fine analytical thinking about the workings of La Cosa Nostra, since you are Sicilian please tell the Godfather I meant no disrespect and to not put a horse head in my bed.<br /><br />Goatman: Yes, I did and the instructor is a published novelist and a very nice lady.Commander Zaiushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11000824454124236774noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-829836469690492751.post-38342011156774885352010-02-05T15:16:16.998-05:002010-02-05T15:16:16.998-05:00Give me a subject . . . now a verb and an adverb....Give me a subject . . . now a verb and an adverb. How about consonant then a period. A conjunction and a pronoun then a semicolon and an infinitive. Wallah, a sentence with no thought given whatsoever.<br /><br />I hope that you didn't have to pay for that course!?goatmanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02317617928368945316noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-829836469690492751.post-61539603286955948972010-02-05T12:57:58.764-05:002010-02-05T12:57:58.764-05:00Being a Sicilian... :P I know that this guy is hea...Being a Sicilian... :P I know that this guy is headed for trouble by taking that money.<br />I think that the dry cleaner gave it to him on purpose. To get it out of his store. Perhaps he will come looking for it soon......<br /><br />((Hugs))<br />lauraLaurahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09226811839348899360noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-829836469690492751.post-86906289445351555942010-02-05T08:09:19.414-05:002010-02-05T08:09:19.414-05:00Martha certainly deserved a break and let's ho...Martha certainly deserved a break and let's hope that Joe has learned his lessons and treats this new opportunity with the respect it deserves. I wonder where they go and how do they rebuild their lives?Holte Enderhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10356437917387847542noreply@blogger.com